2012年MBA全国联考英语作文写作演练与点评

　　1 Study the following drawing carefully and write an essay in which you should：

　　1. describe the drawing，

　　2. interpret its meaning， and

　　3. make your comment.

　　You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2.

　　该文可分三段来写。第一段描述图画。第二段分析城市化带来的严重后果。第三段谈解决问题的办法。This picture leaves a deep impression on me： a skyscraper， like a beast with sharp teeth， is pulling a big tree completely out of the earth. Anyone who has seen this picture will realize that urbanization has made a serious impact on the environment.

　　Although urbanization has improved our quality of life in many aspects， we must be aware that it has also brought about a series of unfavorable consequences. First， the farmland in the country is shrinking. For one thing， some rural areas become cities during the process of urbanization， chiefly because they are near big cities and thus included in the urban development plan. For another， more and more rural people are now working in the cities. They bring advanced technology back to their homeland and the land may serve diversified purposes nowadays. Second， sometimes， the rural land， rivers and air are polluted. When more and more new factories are set up， the surrounding environment is likely to decay.

　　In my mind， it is not necessarily the result. First， if urban planners take the environment into consideration before the actual construction stage， the present situation will be much better. Second， every citizen should be both the advocator and the practitioner of environment protection. Third， laws and regulations should be established to punish those environment violators severely. Only when such measures are implemented will cities take on a better look and bring all of us a better life.第一段首句描述图画，并在第二句中点出了图画说明的社会问题——城市化对环境带来的负面影响。

　　第二段首句是段落统领句，该句旨在引出下文的严重后果。可是城市化是有利有弊甚至利大于弊的事情，如果不想谈有利的方面，就可以使用一个让步状语从句，从而不失客观。这里请大家用心领悟。而后分两方面来说：一是耕地减少，二是环境污染。

　　第三段首句别具一格，是特殊的段落统领句，与传统的办法类统领句根据不同情况加以使用，可取得良好效果。比如说，如果图画给人的冲击很大，就可以使用一些主观色彩较强的句型来感染读者。而后分城市规划者、民众和法律三方面来说，条理非常清晰。最后一句是结语，包括一个平行结构和“城市让生活更美好”的理念，请大家体会。在准备大作文的过程中，大家慢慢可将具体步骤和相应的时间确立下来。熟悉操作步骤，能极大地提高效率和成功的概率。拿到题目之后，一是看图读图，一是看指令。综合考虑后将主题确定下来，就可以构造文章的整体结构了。之后考虑每段大致分成几点来写。如果熟悉这个过程，速度是非常快的。在这上面节省下来的时间，可以被用在对词句的斟酌之上。这样主动权掌握在自己手里，考试中就会有稳定的发挥了。

[FS:PAGE]　　漫画的抽象度逐年增加，这是不争的事实。之所以不会增加太快，且中间有所反复（如08年的比07年的抽象度低），是为了不让大量学生跑题。但是如果不训练自己的理解力，就可能在下面的考试中吃大亏。

　　我们之所以还不能灵活地驾驭语言，是因为接触得不够多，没有采用“沉浸式”的方法。深刻的体验才会让我们懂得语言之美，大量的“读、背、仿、写、改”的体验才能让我们的语感有大幅提高，这才是真正的写作之道。